Chapter 1 – Premonitions

This story is a follow-up to the award-winning best seller, The Jackrabbit Factor (available in its entirety as a free download at JackrabbitFactor.com). Its sequel begins:

Ten years earlier, and
30 miles northwest of Great Bend, Kansas

Morgan’s heart pounded in his head as he frantically placed his suffering boy in the back seat of his car and threw the .22 caliber rifle in the trunk. As he raced to the main highway, he knew he might still be forty minutes away from anyone who could help, and his mind flooded with echoes of his last conversation with Rita:

“Hunting Jackrabbits? Honey, he’s only six! Can’t you wait until I get back from Mother’s so I can keep him out of the line of fire? I know how focused you can get and I know how spontaneous he can be. I just can’t help think he might race ahead of you, and you might not notice.”

“Rita, don’t worry, I’ll be careful. Nothing will happen to him.”

“Morgan Stillwater, you promise me he’ll be safe. It was too hard to get pregnant, and carry him full term in the first place to have anything happen to him now.” There had been a long pause until she softly asked, “Are you going to let him shoot?”

“Been thinking about it. I was six when Dad let me try the rifle.”

“Please don’t do it, at least—will you just—wait until I get back? Mother’s doing better; I can be home by dinnertime Thursday. What if you save it for next weekend, and we can all go together?”

“Honey, let me have this time with him. Ever since the day you told me you were finally pregnant, I’ve been dreaming of doing father-and-son things with him. No offense, but I just don’t think it would be the same with ‘Mom’ coming along to make sure we’re okay.”

Rita’s voice turned grave. “Promise me, Morgan. Promise me you’ll have your eyes on Isaac the whole time. I don’t care if you don’t come home with a single rabbit. All I care is that this family stays in tact. Got that?”

“Everything’s gonna be okay, Rita. It’s just a rabbit hunt.”

~~~~~~

Morgan glanced in the rear view mirror. Isaac was breathing faintly and his lips were darker than the last time he checked. Cursing the day he had to drop out before getting into medical school because of his failing health and mounting bills, Morgan hit the steering wheel hard with both hands. “I could have helped him! I might have known what to do!”

He picked up his cell phone, hoping that somehow it might have magically charged itself, even though it had died more than an hour previously. No luck, and no charger.

Suddenly the anguish overcame him and he began to sob uncontrollably. A weak, but restless movement from the back seat and the pallor of his son caused Morgan’s foot to press harder on the accelerator.

“Oh, Rita,” Morgan moaned through clenched teeth as his speed reached 95 miles an hour. The grasslands whooshed by in a blur under glowing clouds against an electric blue sky. “I was careful, I was so careful!

Finally, the barren landscape gave way to an occasional silo and farmhouse. Do I stop and call for an ambulance, or do I just look for a hospital on my own? He didn’t know how serious Isaac’s condition was, or how much time he had to work with. He decided to press on.

After another five long minutes as he entered a small country town, Morgan heaved a sigh of relief to see a blue sign on the side of the road with the large capital “H” and an arrow, indicating there was, in fact, a hospital nearby.

Pulling in under the portico labeled “Emergency”, Morgan screeched to a halt and labored to carry his son through the automatic glass doors. The receptionist stood, responding to Morgan’s alarmed expression and she signaled a nurse from triage to come quickly.

Miraculously, there were no other patients waiting to be seen in this sleepy little town hospital he had stumbled upon. The nurse quickly provided a bed, called for a doctor, and began asking questions.

“Is this your son?”

“Yes, he is.” Morgan was in a daze.

The nurse checked Isaac’s vitals while asking, “What happened?”

“Uh—,” his voice cracked with a spontaneous whimper, but he quickly continued between anxious breaths, “we were hunting jackrabbits, and I spotted one, and I shot, and then I don’t know why, but Isaac collapsed, because he wasn’t even in my way, and I can’t find a wound anywhere. I don’t know what happened.”

“Has he been ill?”

“Uh, I don’t know, I mean, he’s been extra tired lately, but I just figured he’s been in a growth spurt, and today I thought it was because I woke him up so early.”

Just then the doctor arrived and Morgan watched intently as the two professionals quietly searched for an explanation. At length the doctor spoke. Addressing the nurse he instructed, “Darla, arrange transport. Mister, uh—”

“Stillwater. Morgan Stillwater.”

“Mister Stillwater, we’re a small facility; and we don’t specialize in pediatric cardiology. I’d like to have him transported to Wichita right away.”

Cardiology?” Morgan fell back in his chair. Shaking his head he explained, “Doctor, I had a valve replaced five years ago. You think he might have the same condition?”

“These things can be hereditary. We’ll only know for sure after he’s seen in Wichita.”

Speaking to himself Morgan scoffed sadly, “So a bullet didn’t hit him.” Blindsided, he rubbed his face. Weakly, numbly he asked, “Could you contact Dr. Ray Golward at the Cypress Heart facility? He’s an old friend from high school who is also my cardiologist now. I’d trust his recommendations.”

“Certainly.” The doctor nodded and left the room.

With one horrific tumult put to rest, Morgan realized the real one had only just begun. “Oh, Rita. How am I going to tell you?”

(Let us know what you think about this NEW Chapter 1 before you proceed to Chapter 2…)

50 Responses to “Chapter 1 – Premonitions”

  • 100% better! This is a real hook for a first chapter. I can’t wait to read the whole book!

  • Melanie:

    I love it, Leslie!! I love how fast it moves and it got my attention right away. I’m excited to read more!

  • You know how to hook a reader! Love it!

  • Sucks you right in!! Love it!

  • The part when Morgan tells his wife the hunting trip wouldn’t be the same if she were there rang true! I can just relate so much to that conversation. It kept me reading to the end of the whole chpter, then I found myself thinking…”if it were my son.”

  • Ditto to all the comments above! Great job, Leslie!!!

  • Leslie, I like how you take us right into the story. I would imagine that many of your readers will have read, or read about the JRF and are anxious to read this story.
    Starting right away with this fast paced chapter brings us right back into the action.

    I wonder if my reaction would be different if I had not read the first version of Chapter One though.

  • Valerie:

    Great story-telling; the tension was there right at the start to get you interested; the guilt thoughts of the father and his frantic decision-making were so life-like; and the mother’s deep concerns for their boy was just so absolutely real. You couldn’t have lost interest if you tried!

  • Pene:

    You got me totally engulfed in these peoples lives.

  • Christopher:

    It definitely pulls you right in, a real page turner.

  • Mark Bronson:

    Nice hook. Good way to start. I’m anxious to read the rest.

  • Kate Dauphinee:

    Love it! And I haven’t JF yet. Can’t wait to read the rest.

  • Isaac:

    Great fast paced story and I can’t wait to read more.

  • M Lynn Fournier:

    Awesome! You catch the reader’s attention with the very first sentence. There is a good flow and continuing character development, as well. You have a great way of humanizing your characters that makes them real people that your readers can connect with. I can actually see and feel this from both Morgan’s and Rita’s perspective, and can’t wait to see how it turns out.

    I agree with Mary Butler. It is 100% better. Way to go!

    You Rock!

  • Marion Mitchell:

    Hi Lesley, I just read JRF last night, and LOVED it. Not only do you write about something that can change the life of everyone of us, you do it in a way that truly draws the reader in. I can’t wait to read this next book. Congratulations on using your talents so very well!!

  • Deborah:

    Hi Leslie – boy this is really fast moving! I can’t wait to read more. I hope the rest of the book is as complete as Jackrabbit Factor.

  • Myriam:

    Made me think about why it happened now? Did the mother’s thoughts and fear influence the situation (subconsciously)? Was there something to learn from it? Why the little boy? Brought up many questions. Like the others, I was pulled into the story immediately. Thank you.

  • Marguerite Garrard:

    wow. awesome writing. you are really feeling the flow and it shows. thank you for sharing of your talents.

  • barbara:

    Must read the original JRF, if it is anything like this page then wow…..like Bob Proctor stated, you are creative and it shows in the spontaneous flow of emotions and events that carry the setup without one even being aware, they are just carried along on the tide, a real page turner…can’t wait till it becomes available Leslie…..remarkable, thank you for the previews…

  • Dave:

    I was afraid it would be an anti-gun piece from the setup. It drew me in.

  • Georgia:

    riveting!

  • Kare':

    Oooooo Weeee! This is delicious…from the start! Can’t wait to digest more of it. Great job

  • Rebecca:

    It makes me want to read the rest of it to see what happens! Can’t wait to get the book. I wish I could download it like I did the Jackrabbit Factor. I love your work, Leslie, and your mission. Thank you!

  • Rebecca:

    I said I would like to download Portal to Genius like I did Jackrabbit Factor but I didn’t mean for free. It would just be good to have instant access as soon as purchased. Thanks again for the wonderful information you provide to those of us who have been struggling but not really understanding why or how to change the pattern.

  • Michael Dawkins:

    It is absolutely gripping, and definitely a story one would not want to stop reading until it is finished…great work.

  • Natasha::

    Wow – such a good start. Looking forward to reading the rest as JRF has been such an eye-opener for me. Keep up the great work!

  • alejandra:

    This is great. Your writing style engages me from the very start. You make that connection with the reader. I mean, you build suspense through the plot and the characters are so human. I like it very much.

  • Diane:

    Terrific…I can’t wait to read more! It captures your interest right away. Great start and I am looking forward to reading more.

  • Gael:

    Excellent first chapter Leslie! Well done…ready and wanting to read on!

  • Paul:

    I agree this was terrific and pulled you in from the beginning. Where is the rest of the book? It is a must-have to read!

  • daniel jones:

    You weave quite a story milady, couldn’t believe the chapter ended, can’t wait for more, bravo – DJ

  • Francois:

    Facinating start Leslie. I love your work. This is new to me and I can`t wait to master my mind. Thanks

  • Andrew:

    I’m hooked

  • Melody:

    I could identify with the husband being upset that he had gone ahead and taken his son hunting when his wife had asked him repeatedly to wait.

  • Mary:

    I’m hooked instantly!

  • Chris:

    Thank you for sharing this Leslie! I can’t wait to read the rest of the whole book. Leslie you are such a talented person. I am so grateful that recently, in a difficult time in my life I was introduced to the Jack Rabbit Factor. Thank you for all that you share of yourself with others. Please know that you have made a difference in my life, when everything looked bleak. I am continually learning, growing and changing the way I think.

  • Craig:

    Wow I want the rest please!

  • Karen:

    Loved this, felt so sorry for the father having to tell his wife he had shot their son…….but then of course found out he didn’t…..only to find out the boys heart may be sick, can’t wait to read the rest. Thanks Leslie

  • Thoba:

    My stomach is knotted and my breathing is suspended and I can feel a little prayer for relief. Can’t wait for chapter 2.

  • Josephine:

    I like the story already, my heart is beating so fast cant wait to read chapter 2

  • Josephine:

    I like the story, cant wait to read chapter 2

  • Berta:

    This certainly grabs my attention & I want to read more…

  • Gripping read, as always I love Leslie’s style of writing. Also Morgan means something quite special in my life so I was very surprised to see the name being used … must be the LOA at work! xx

  • Robert:

    Excellent. Moves, and it’s very clear with Dad’s feelings.

  • KAY:

    I like it very much, can’t wait to see the next sample chapter. I sent a copy of the Jack Rabbit Factor to my son in prison, he will be out shortly, and I feel it is a good inspiration for him. Thanks so much

  • marcia:

    Brilliant work.I will borrow a term from one of your readers that so accurately describes the effect of this book.”it sucks you in” right from the start.

  • Tamra Mather:

    i want to know more… ” )

  • David Ryan:

    This is some great writing

  • Heidi:

    Hooked me right away! Can’t wait for more!

  • Sandra:

    Thrilling! Can’t wait to see how the story unfolds.

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